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討論:Leftist publication seeks news autonomy

出自香港新聞網 - 樹仁新傳系學生實習習作

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Lead needed to be tightened, otherwise the angle is good.

The story doesn't flow so well, however. It jumps to the Wenzhou issue, which reads like a different topic from the lead. You need to start paragraphs with a main idea and move to specifics, such as Wenzhou after.

You also mention the Li Wangyang story, but give no context or background.

Lead: 6/10 Angle: 28/35 Headline: 5/10

Headline: Leftist publication seeks news autonomy

Better: China news agency seeks to autonomy

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