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2.5 billion dollars create a TV new world

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(For?) the situation that TV industry is monopolize by TVB in Hong Kong, Ricky Wong, the co-founder and Chairman of City Telecom (H.K.) Limited (CTI), calls it as “old world”. Because Ricky has started (on?) the project about free television to create a “new world”, which used 2.5 billion Hong Kong dollars. (All of those innovations Ricky made due to his cognitive values: moving forward, taking the lead and acting directly.(edit sentence, a bit confusing (which innovations?)

Today, Ricky Wong attended the General Assembly in Hong Kong Shue Yan University with his CTI team, and claimed that a TV production center which was over 200 thousand square foot would be built in Tsuengkwano. This center will have the largest TV production studio in Asia with 15 thousand square foot. The drama which CTI made will use live shooting to (increase more realities?) in the future. Moreover, the center is open for public and welcome students and audiences to visit. For such improvement, Ricky said, “Life is for improvement. I (should push myself move forward-awkward phrasing).” Besides, CTI also pick out elites from TVB and other places to make sure to take the lead in TV.

In this “new world”, creators have more freedom than before, which is a big change. A member of CTI team stated that she could discuss (x) with her boss now, which was almost impossible before in TVB. “I like to communicate with others directly,” Ricky said,” and I won’t ask them to write in set patterns.” In this case, the screenwriters can fully use their creativities and have to be responsible for what they produce. Some writers may be scared, but talented creators will thank for such place to do their best. This is precisely why Ricky is confident that the “new world” will be successful in the near future.--095006 2012年2月22日 (三) 01:00 (UTC)

Good ending! I like the detail about the new sudio, and the quotes used. The only issue is with some awkward phrases, missing words and misplaced prepositions (the for at the beginning is not necessary).


REVISION:

For the situation that TV industry is monopolize by TVB in Hong Kong, Ricky Wong, the co-founder and Chairman of City Telecom (H.K.) Limited (CTI), calls it as “old world”, because he has started on a free TV project to create a “new world”, which used 2.5 billion Hong Kong dollars.

Ricky said he does his business according to his cognitive values: moving forward, taking the lead and acting directly, when he attended the General Assembly in Hong Kong Shue Yan University with his CTI team today. He unfolded his plan that a TV production center which was over 200 thousand square foot would be built in Tsuengkwano. This center will have the largest TV production studio in Asia with 15 thousand square foot. The drama which CTI made will use live shooting to make it more realistic. Moreover, the center is open for public and welcome students and audiences to visit. For such improvement, Ricky said, “Life is for improvement, so I should always push myself to move forward.” Besides, CTI also pick out elites from TVB and other places to make sure to take the lead in TV.

In this “new world”, creators have more freedom than before, which is a big change. A member of CTI team stated that she could communicate with her boss now, which was almost impossible before in TVB. “I like to talk with others directly,” Ricky stated,” and I won’t ask them to write in set patterns.” In this case, the screenwriters can fully use their creativities and have to be responsible for what they produce. Some writers may be scared, but talented creators will thank for such place to do their best. This is precisely why Ricky is confident that the “new world” will be successful in the near future.

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