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CSR comes secondly in estate

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(adj missing, one used right before estate to refer to the market) Estate plays a decisive role in Hong Kong, even the chief executive wants support from the land agent. (Today, however,-edit, the two "bump" against each other) the former TVB reporter, present(adverb ending) (article) business man Ivan M.W. Yau argued that CSR comes secondly in estate. (need to state what CSR stands for in opening)

Ivan, the general manager of Sino Group Corporate Communications Assistant, attended the general assembly in Hong Kong Shue Yan University today. Ivan showed the video of his company and praised the CSR of Sino Land, claiming that companies should (repay-use pay back or contribute to) communities. However, when being questioned (that?-about whether) Sino Land ignores the requirements of general public and always sells the real estate in high price, which has no social responsibility, Ivan disagreed (sentence is too long-revise). He thought a commercial organization has variety responsibilities, of which the CSR should be listed after the business strategies in free economic system. Ivan stated that chances for selling low price real estate wouldn’t come every time, but the company has to be run and he has to give a proper response of company’s operating status to the shareholders. “Do we (Sino Land) run for helping people?” Ivan stressed,” estate is kind of business but not social welfare.”

Ivan even rejected to leave a response towards the issue of land monopoly, he said he couldn’t speak for his company and only wanted to share his personal experience today. --095006 2012年3月7日 (三) 01:03 (UTC)

Late submission. Otherwise good work on corrections. This story makes a good point about the hypocrisy of CSR, you simply need to express it in shorter/clearer sentences. Keep it up! Also for the title-comes second to real estate.


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CSR comes second to real estate

Real estate state plays a decisive role in Hong Kong, even the chief executive wants support from the land agent. However, the former TVB reporter Ivan M.W. Yau, who is a business man now, argued that corporate social responsibility (CSR) comes second to real estate today.

Ivan, the general manager of Sino Group Corporate Communications Assistant, attended the general assembly in Hong Kong Shue Yan University today. Ivan showed the video of his company and praised the CSR of Sino Land, claiming that companies should contribute to communities. However, citizens consider that Sino Land ignores the requirements of general public and always sells the real estate in high price. Therefore, Sino is questioned about whether has no social responsibility. As for the doubt, Ivan disagreed and stated that a commercial organization has variety responsibilities, of which the CSR should be listed after the business strategies in free economic system. Ivan thought that chances for selling low price real estate wouldn’t come every time, but the company has to be run and he has to give a proper response of company’s operating status to the shareholders. “Do we (Sino Land) run for helping people?” Ivan stressed,” estate is kind of business but not social welfare.”

Ivan even rejected to leave a response towards the issue of land monopoly, he said he couldn’t speak for his company and only wanted to share his personal experience today.

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