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Candy Lo: HKCNA has its stand point
出自香港新聞網 - 樹仁新傳系學生實習習作
(Your lead was bloated with information not directly related to the points that you were driving at. You should avoid doing this again. A lead should be concise with choice wording to make your readers understand what you are going to say. The DBC incidence did not have anything to do with your article at all. If the main point of your article was to tell your readers that most of the HK people suspected that the Chinese government has interfered with the affairs of media in Hong Kong, Candy Lo's denial however was too weak an argument. You should read and write more English to improve your skill. )
-105076 2012年10月31日 (三) 00:30 (UTC)
--105076 陳逸思 CHAN, YAT SZE(UTC)
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Reporter: Natalie Chan Yat Sze
In the past years, there were many social movements. Undoubtedly, Hong Kong people are more enthusiastic about political issues. Lo claims that she appreciates the social movement calmly. She said China has loosen the restrictions of reporting social movements. The China News Agency started reporting the people's commemoration of June 4 five years ago but not to avoid. Lo describes Joshua Wong as Hong Kong China News Agency. Joshua is studying in the leftst school - Fukien Secondary School, but still adhere to the social protest, as in HKCNA. Lo advices Hong Kong people to participate in different social movements but also take the initiative to understand the background of the movement, and do not blindly follow to avoid being misled.
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