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Car crashes, new media rises

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(Car?) crashes, new media rises

The 724 high speed train crash in Wan Zhou caused more than 30 deaths and 200 injured(adj-should be noun). The accident did not just expose the (development?-expose implies a negative occurrence, however development is positive...) of mass transit railway in China but also changed the way disasters are reported. Unexpectedly, the first to report the crash was a passenger who wrote in “weibo”, a 140 words limit blog.


                      Rico Yeung


Mr. Qian Gang, the University of Hong Kong's Journalism and Media Studies Centre Co-Director of China Media Project, said the “weibo” was far quicker than the official media to report the accident which brought a new (environment?-inap can change the environment, not bring a new one) in online media.



The first release of the information was a photo from a passenger which showed the time the car crashed (repeating yourself). Yet, from the information released by official media, the crash time delayed four minutes according to the Ministry of Railways of China (unclear sentence, the report was 4mins late?).



“The new media (like-informal) “weibo” provides a new channel for information other than the traditional media,” Qian said.




From the crash, Qian thinks the new media, particularly online platforms play an important (role on?) traditional media. Online channels provide supplementary information for audiences. Nowadays, reporters from traditional media also make use of “weibo” to upload photos and short summary of the news before officially releasing the story.



“(Even in the visit to Wan Zhou of the premier of China Wen Jia Bao after the crash)-condense clause, too many prepositions (in visit, to, of), the reporters did not just wait for his speech but take (vt-in past) photos and upload them onto their “weibo” for surfers,” Qian said.



The use of new media is a mutually beneficial for media corporations and audiences. The traditional media can make use of the information from the victims from disaster by checking their “weibo”. The audiences can receive updated information and (more different-can be ambiguous, more reports, or more different?) reports from the bloggers and reduce relying (two verbs one after the other, second should be noun) on the official media.

Your article has a clear news angle however the grammatical mistakes make it hard to follow your train of thought. Read your article out loud while proof reading to catch awkward phrases, or missing verbs.


--095118 楊永豪 YEUNG, WING HO RICO 2011年10月25日 (二) 18:53 (UTC)
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