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Chiu Sin Chun says Financial Budget Lacks of Perspectives

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“Overempha(size) on following the principles of prudent management of public finances leaves no perspectives for the lame duck government, ” a senior financial commentator says.(quote is too dense, the reader cannot make out commentator's thoughts-make it more to the point)

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Chiu Sin Chun, a well-recognized financial commentator from Now TV, says the budget plan unveiled last week lacks (of?) prospect prone to one-off relief measures instead, showing the Tsang’s government failed to laid any foundation to city’s long term development. (rephrase, sentence is confusing)


Chiu criticizes the approach adapted by the authority on financial planning (as if? use other transition words) putting the cart before the horse. “Expenditures made according to revenue is reasonable, yet the Tsang’s government widen income source to meet expense depriving the room of nourishing potential industries,” he says.(again too dense, try to keep one, two thoughts max per sentence, or provide more connective, (thus, leading to, as a result, etc)


The HKSAR government has long (been being deemed?) tilting to tycoons and property developers, “the government have no plan in training elites or professionals out of financial sector throughout years (train out?-rephrase), further lessen the diversities of economic activities in town,” says Chiu.

This article does not provide sufficient information about the criticized budget (where are the figures). Try to keep your sentences short and to the point. Also check title, perspective should be singular, not plural.




--095093 2012年2月7日 (二) 20:35 (UTC)
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