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Community Chest Works On Aging Population and Income Gap

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Aging population and Income gap are hot social issue nowadays. ((vary up your opening sentence...a bit stale)) While the government is showing concern on them, The Community Chest is trying hard to help disadvantaged suffered from them. ((too many prepositions and pronouns))


Louie H S Tong, PR manager of The Community Chest was invited to the general assembly of Journalism and Communication Department at Hong Kong Shue Yan University yesterday. She was hoping to introduce The Community Chest and collect opinions towards the organization from students.


"Aging population is getting more serious in Hong Kong. It is forecasted that the aging population will conquer 27% of total population by 2033," Tong said. To cope with that, Tong said The Community Chest had been increasing their resources on elderly services, such as taking care of elderly living alone, paralyzed and handicapped etc. Tong said services would then be expanded to those in retirement and Alzheimer.


"Income gap is getting wider. The Community Chest is now working on it. We aim to help those on the verge of poverty," Tong said. She said Hong Kong was now having 1.26 million people who were classified as poor and poor children had about 205,000. "We believe that poverty will pass onto the next generation if we do nothing. We also believe that knowledge can help them out of poverty so we are trying to help them in academic like providing poor children free tutorials, free computers, free stationery and free books, "Tong said.


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