Recently, “Guo Meimei Scandal” has been widespread throughout the world, which raise(s) public concern about the problem of transparency and the usage of donation (of-change preposition) the charity organizations. However, the manager of Community Relations Department of The Community Chest, Tong Hang Shing saw this incident as a good opportunity to show how Community Relation has done a great job in using the donation to help (the needy in the general assembly held by Hong Kong Shue Yan University Today-consider meaning/revise clause).
Guo Meimei, a netizen identified herself as the general manager of the Red Cross Society of China, has posted several photos of her luxury bags on her blog last summer. This act has aroused widespread debates. Although Red Cross has issued a statement to clarify that there was no connection between Gui Meimei and (itself-change to the organization), but it was hard to stop the rumour.
Although “Guo Meimei Scandal” has (aroused-use a synonym) public worry, Tong Hang Shing believed they could make good use of this chance to show the public, the committee members as well as the needy how they used the donation to provide different services and made investment. She believed, “News can be something good if you can make good use of the news to do some positive promotion. It can help the organization to rebuild the trust (between the public &...).”
--095103 余嘉慧 YU, KA WAI 2012年3月13日 (二) 20:19 (UTC)
Kathy, I see you copy/pasted your work, but did not correct it-why is that?
You mean the last article? I did the correction. I have corrected the grammar like tenses and preposition that you have corrected. I have bold the part now, you can have a check. Thanks!
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Recently, “Guo Meimei Scandal” has been widespread throughout the world, which raises public concern about the problem of transparency and the usage of donation by the charity organizations. However, in the general assembly held by Hong Kong Shue Yan University today,the manager of Community Relations Department of The Community Chest, Tong Hang Shing saw this incident as a good opportunity to show how Community Relation has done a great job in using the donation to help the needy.
Guo Meimei, a netizen identified herself as the general manager of the Red Cross Society of China, has posted several photos of her luxury bags on her blog last summer. This act has aroused widespread debates. Although Red Cross has issued a statement to clarify that there was no connection between Gui Meimei and the organization, but it was hard to stop the rumour.
Although “Guo Meimei Scandal” has agitated public worry, Tong Hang Shing believed they could make good use of this chance to show the public, the committee members as well as the needy how they used the donation to provide different services and made investment. She believed, “News can be something good if you can make good use of the news to do some positive promotion. It can help the organization to rebuild the trust between the organization and the public.”
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095103 余嘉慧 YU, KA WAI 2012年3月27日 (二) 23:44 (UTC)