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The local will like to use the high technology in coming years

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David Castaneda and Frantz Lasorne, the co-founders of Visionaries 777, said Hong Kong people would like to use high technology more in coming few years.

David pointed out that the technology of Augmented Reality (AR) caused a popular issue in the world by Pokemon Go which was a mobile game but only famous for 3 months. He explained the reason because the public did not have sufficient knowledge of it, therefore they just focused on the new game.

Frantz said middle people in Hong Kong were still loved to play Pokemon Go, so he was positive to the local market. He compared Shanghai and Japan, Frantz still believed Hong Kong was a good place to start up your business.--145041 2017年3月7日 (二) 20:45 (CST)


Comment: Avoid using the speaker’s title in his own company in the lead of the story. Come up with an alternative way to address the speaker(s), such as two young entrepreneurs, founder of a tech start-up / company.

         In English news writing, we normally use the person's last name when we reference to them for the second time and repeatedly. 
         Although Pokemon Go was an instant hit and became a globe phenomenon, the popularity only lasted for three months.  
         Came up with a better lead, there is no news in your lead. 

My suggestion Passionate with your work and be the best, two young entrepreneurs shared their recipes of success with Shue Yan University students.

David Castaneda, co-founder of a tech company, and his business partner Frantz Lasorne told students that passion is crucial whether they can excel in the industry.

The duo, one from Colombia and one from France, set up their company in Hong Kong … years ago. They are attracted by the city’s vibrancy and friendliness to business. Developing technology products for clients from different part of the global, the duo remind students that they have to look for jobs that they are passionate about which is the perquisite be the best of the industry.


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