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Char: The society needs an affinitive CE.

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The Hong Kong Chief Executive Election will take place on 26 March. Stephen Char, a member of Legal Election Committee said Hong Kong does not need a dominated chief executive but an adaptable one.
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S Char, an election committee member, said he will vote for John T in the CE election on Sunday, praising the former finanial secretary's sense of humour and affinity with the people.
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Char said he will vote for John Tsang Chun-wah because of his sense of humor. He continued that he can see Tsang's affinity from his behavior.  
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speaking at axxxx Tuesday, he said Hong Kong did not need a chief executive who is (too strong and dominating), but one who is able to communicate with different people. (similar point)
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In order for Tsang to get enough votes, Char said he needs to get about 200-300 votes from pan-democracy camp. “Tsang can relieve the struggle of Hong Kong, bringing both pan-democracy camp and pro-democracy camp closer,” he added.
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In order for Tsang to get enough votes, Char said he needs to get about 200-300 votes from pan-democracy camp (this sentence is unclear). “Tsang can lessen the contradictions in the society by bringing the pan-democracy camp and pro-democracy camp closer,” he added.
--[[使用者:145136|145136]] 2017年3月22日 (三) 20:16 (CST)
--[[使用者:145136|145136]] 2017年3月22日 (三) 20:16 (CST)
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71 marks
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1. both 'dominated' and 'adaptable' are vague adjectives.
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2. second para is more simple and direct as lead.
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3. good to write simple sentence
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4. first sentence is background info. should not be used as lead.

在2017年4月12日 (三) 09:09的當前修訂版本

By Chan Yiu 21 March 2017


S Char, an election committee member, said he will vote for John T in the CE election on Sunday, praising the former finanial secretary's sense of humour and affinity with the people.

speaking at axxxx Tuesday, he said Hong Kong did not need a chief executive who is (too strong and dominating), but one who is able to communicate with different people. (similar point)

(need a bit more elaboration here)

In order for Tsang to get enough votes, Char said he needs to get about 200-300 votes from pan-democracy camp (this sentence is unclear). “Tsang can lessen the contradictions in the society by bringing the pan-democracy camp and pro-democracy camp closer,” he added.


--145136 2017年3月22日 (三) 20:16 (CST)

71 marks

1. both 'dominated' and 'adaptable' are vague adjectives. 2. second para is more simple and direct as lead. 3. good to write simple sentence 4. first sentence is background info. should not be used as lead.

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