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Char: The society needs an affinitive CE.

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By Chan Yiu 21 March 2017


S Char, an election committee member, said he will vote for John T in the CE election on Sunday, praising the former finanial secretary's sense of humour and affinity with the people.

speaking at axxxx Tuesday, he said Hong Kong did not need a chief executive who is (too strong and dominating), but one who is able to communicate with different people. (similar point)

(need a bit more elaboration here)

In order for Tsang to get enough votes, Char said he needs to get about 200-300 votes from pan-democracy camp (this sentence is unclear). “Tsang can lessen the contradictions in the society by bringing the pan-democracy camp and pro-democracy camp closer,” he added.


--145136 2017年3月22日 (三) 20:16 (CST)

71 marks

1. both 'dominated' and 'adaptable' are vague adjectives. 2. second para is more simple and direct as lead. 3. good to write simple sentence 4. first sentence is background info. should not be used as lead.

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