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Leong: Aggressive personality is the reason for Carrie Lam's low popularity.

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Alan Leong Kah-kit, the Chairman of Civic Party, said Carrie Lam should show her respect for Hong Kong to citizens.
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Alan Leong Kah-kit, Chairman of Civic Party, said CE-elect Carrie Lam should listen to different voices of the people.
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He said although Lam won the post of CE with 777 votes she did not win support and respect from the people. Her rival John Tsng did the opposite losing the election but winning the hearts of the people. Leong said it was because Lam was too aggressive and that Tsang was an easygoing person.
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“Carrie Lam received 777 votes in the Chief Executive election, but she got low respects from Hong Kong people. Conversely, John Tsang received most respects from the citizens. Their characteristics are the main reason accounted for this. Lam is aggressive while Tsang is easygoing,” said Leong.
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Leong added that Lam should not make the same speech (what speech?) as Leung Chun-ying. “Lam should listen to different opinions in the society, otherwise the government will be harder to operate,” he explained. “ Leung Chun-ying is good at creating enemies. His actions are regarded as improper from the eyes of my psychiatrist friend, ” said Leung,
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Leong added that Lam should not make the same speech  as Leung Chun-ying. “Lam should listen to different opinions in the society, otherwise the government will be harder to operate,” he explained. “ Leung Chun-ying is good at creating enemies. His actions are regarded as improper from the eyes of my psychiatrist friend, ” said Leung,
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Also, Leong said the government had no intention to develop subcultures, and refused licensing for the industrial art groups.  
Also, Leong said the government had no intention to develop subcultures, and refused licensing for the industrial art groups.  
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--[[使用者:145136|145136]] 2017年5月10日 () 02:47 (CST)
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74 marks
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1. lead is vague, need to be more specific
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2. some sentences are unclear.
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3. remember to give context to tell a story (Hidden Agenda point)

在2017年5月24日 (三) 19:17的當前修訂版本

By Chan Yiu 10 May 2017


Alan Leong Kah-kit, Chairman of Civic Party, said CE-elect Carrie Lam should listen to different voices of the people.

He said although Lam won the post of CE with 777 votes she did not win support and respect from the people. Her rival John Tsng did the opposite losing the election but winning the hearts of the people. Leong said it was because Lam was too aggressive and that Tsang was an easygoing person.

(original quote is unclear. better paraphrased it)

Leong added that Lam should not make the same speech (what speech?) as Leung Chun-ying. “Lam should listen to different opinions in the society, otherwise the government will be harder to operate,” he explained. “ Leung Chun-ying is good at creating enemies. His actions are regarded as improper from the eyes of my psychiatrist friend, ” said Leung,

(need to give context of his remarks, which is about Hidden Agenda)

Also, Leong said the government had no intention to develop subcultures, and refused licensing for the industrial art groups.


“It is not reasonable that the government used $21.6 billion in developing West Kowloon Cultural District, but not giving resources for subculture’s development,” criticized Leong. “The democratic camp should have more connections with the citizens and fight for the right of the minorities.”


--145136 2017年5月10日 (三) 02:47 (CST)

74 marks

1. lead is vague, need to be more specific 2. some sentences are unclear. 3. remember to give context to tell a story (Hidden Agenda point)

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